Ian (ringbark) wrote,

Less is more

We timed the speech for oratory last night and were aghast to find it was nearly a minute too long. So we chopped off the first paragraph! This isn't as bad as it sounds, and in fact has some advantages. We both acknowledged that the speech started slowly, but now it starts straight off with the bit about Florida, which is a much starker opening imho. We'll see. Come to Parmy next weekend and see how he gets on. I have high hopes. Another advantage of just dropping para 1 is that links still work.

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